Monday, July 28, 2008

MONEY

According to dictionaries, money is anything that is generally accepted as payment for goods, services and even repayment of debts. Money can buy a person almost anything, handbags, clothes, basic neccessities and many many others. Thus, people can do many things with money.

Money can make people do crazy things. Friendship is important, especially when one is in need. However some people just do not treasure friendship. To them, money is always more important. These people do not treasure the people around them like their bestfriends and family. Why? Money, of course. With money, friendship can turn into betrayal and backstabbing. A person could accept bribes to murder or harm his closest friend or even family.

Some people could also forget their virtues when it comes to money. For example being thrifty, some people love to spend their money like they have all the money in the world. No matter how rich a person is, if he or she do not save money, even if its just a little, he or she could go broke. And once a person makes the mistake, then that person would regret it and want to change. But by the time he or she realises it, it would be too late.

Yes, money can buy many things. But has nobody can buy one's heart. Using money to buy love or friendship can end up in making fake friends or relationships. Those friends would only want money and not help the person when he or she is in need. This, i feel, is worse than having no friends at all.

Thus i can conclude that money can buy a person almost anything in the world but there are certain things that cannot be bought and must be treasured. Money is valued differently with different people and so it is up to each individual to judge on how to spend their money wisely.

5 comments:

yibber said...

Liney's essay not bad eh (: I don't spot any spelling mistakes, but maybe a few tense mistakes. I think you tackled the problem about money very well, you defined them and described them. Maybe you could try to elaborate a little bit more, though. Other than that, great job (:

shiyun said...

Good job! :D Thesis statement is available and all the topic sentences are linked to the thesis statement. Paragraphs also show unity. However, in paragraph 3, you used the word "thrifty" wrong. But nevermind, it is still a good essay.

JENN JIAXIN said...

yo!
well,i think you should not start with a definition.it is kind of boring as many people like to start a story that way.try another method that will arouse your reader's attention:)
next,i like your topic sentences.it is easily found and direct:D
jiayou and continue~

A world of homosepien said...

Not bad but there's a few wrong tenses



-Tong Yi & Ryan

apatheticX said...

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